This is a colabberation between Marguerite and myself. How do you like it.?

"break of day"








Out deep in the forest black,


tiny birds chirp forth and back.


Cloaked trees of the midnight air,


Once invisable, reappear.





The sun peeks out from eastern shore,


once sleeping squirrels, wake, explore.


Shades of yellow, orange and blue,


silouettes of clouds come into view.





Time was once I'd greet the day,


now the day, it shows the way.


Hoping for great promises made,


to arrive as a bless-ed parade.





The sun it shines the glow of love,


we bask in it and look above.


Our lives come down, just to this,


you my love, the sun, a kiss.

This is a colabberation between Marguerite and myself. How do you like it.?
I think it is great! Sound like a fresh spring day, a new start in life. Maybe you two can continue to write together. Good luck! Thanks for sharing.
Reply:I have hope! Thanks for choosing my answer. Report It

Reply:I think it's pretty good.


Nice work:)
Reply:I live surrounded by forest and I could easily visualize this scene and the emotions involved. Great effort. I too liked the "forth and back." I like the last 2 stanzas and I'm personally drawn to most poems when every word does not rhyme. There are so many styles and expressions of poetry. I say, " go with what you feel, and that which comes from the heart".....
Reply:Wow, you two make a wonderful writing team my friend %26lt;3





I've been away a bit, long story but, am so very glad to see you and your work and Marguerites too *^_^*





This RoCkEd!
Reply:it's nice and sweet! Great job!





Now for the brutal comments:





I love parts like "forth and back" instead of back and forth:)





The bottom two paragraphs don't seem to rhyme as well as the top two...





PS: I thought it's spelled "silhouettes" ;)